I'm not sure if it's a loading problem or if the end of the story finished with, "Her body shuddered and her fingers entwined in my dark locks." I can't imagine that that is the end of this short story. What I did read was wonderful and would like to finish it if I didn't get the entire story. - Mo - May 29th, 2003   

Great story. i read this and started thinking is my partner my soul mate...and i came to the conclusion she is. yet again one of my all time favorites. well worth the read!! - Rouge - Oct 21st, 2004   

Very tantalizing tale. Would love to see more of this story. - Irish1 - Aug-15-2008   

Great story, a must read. Agree with the author, don't know what I would do either, but would love to see more and find out how she would solve the question. - Intl Warrior - Mar-06-2010   

Intense! - brighteyez - Nov-28-2010   

the most appealing part of this story IMO is the author's note and the questions she poses therein.. tricky, but can you ever deny your heart.. if you meet your soulmate and let her go, wouldn't you feel lost and empty?? my best friend once told me that in everbody's lives the most important person is always oneself.. seems harsh, but i figure that it is true.. - xtra dog - Sep-04-2011   

very good story. I wish it would be longer, but the emotions are there. Thanks for sharing this kind of reflexion with us ;) - yuka - Nov-03-2011   

I just love how Ephiny and Eponin were depicted. So cute XD! - Anonymous - May-04-2010   

This is a hoot and very clever. Nicely situated vignette. Well worth the read! - Georgia - May-06-2010   

Very nicely done, Mayhem. But now that you've used the character of Devillare once, you know I'm going to push you to expand on her storyline. - Del Robertson - Jun-19-2010   

excellent, clever story. - Anonymous - Jul-03-2010   

Great short series - brighteyez - Nov-28-2010   

A nice story .Would have been better with a little sex. - Anonymous - May 21st, 2003   

Very nice,sweet story. - Sara - May 21st, 2003   

Very sweet story. I really enjoyed it, great work! - Melissa - May 26th, 2003   

"Jones" is a hot, romantic tale with a surprize turn that will leave you breathless!!! Thank you, Mayhem, for sharing it with all of us!!! - Michelle - Oct 5th, 2003   

WOW - brighteyez - Oct-15-2008   

Nice story. I think it would have been better if it were longer though. - Lyn B - Feb-20-2011   

sweet story.. - xtra dog - Sep-07-2011   

WOW!!! Doing laundry is right up there with having my teeth pulled without anesthetic, but, now...hmmmm...gonna have to re-evaluate that I think...heh!!! Thank you Mayhem Incarnate for redeeming laundry day with this positively HOT tale!!! - Michelle - Oct 5th, 2003   

another nice pwp by this author.. - xtra dog - Sep-22-2011   

predictable.. the kind of story you knew what was going to happen but you keep reading anyway to prove yourself right. I did like the main character's best friend. - jac - Dec 11th, 2004   

I really enjoyed this story. It is sweet and humorous. I even found myself laughing out loud from the dialogue. I liked the characters and would love to read a sequel. - nada - May-08-2011   

ofcourse the story is predictable.. that's the whole point when you're writing about predictions and premonitions.. you know how the story is going to end, more or less.. well written.. loved the little birdie joke.. - xtra dog - Sep-22-2011   

Okay this was really good - Tylincia - Aug-24-2012   

OMG !! I'm going to go try that TONITE !!! Great PWP !! - Horny1 - May 21st, 2003   

Nice story. HOT! - Luv N Her - May 21st, 2003   

Will you send me step-by-step instructions for that technique? - Seeking - May 21st, 2003   

I'm not saying whether my partner and I pulled this one off or not. What I am saying is that we are in fact giving serious thought to putting this obvious genius writer, (who, btw, should have her imagination bronzed), in our will. This has to be the hottest, PWP I've read in a long time. - Kaye - Jun 18th, 2003   

Holy. Effing. Shit. That was INCREDIBLE!!! - Anonymous - Nov 30th, 2005   

WOW! - Anonymous - Oct-16-2009   

Oh my ... sign me up for the complete instructions too. Whew! Where is that Amazon ice truck when you need it. - Georgia - May-06-2010   

Hot! hot! Hot! - Starry - Aug-02-2010   

Whew! Definitely something *to* try at home. - Anonymous - Apr-21-2011   

Wow, what a great story. - sassy123 - Jun-04-2011   

instruction manual, anyone?? i'll take it.. :) - xtra dog - Sep-07-2011   

WHOA! Holy crap! I SO need to switch teams!! - TK Vix - Dec-06-2011   

=))=))=))it really cracked me up, you should really try this, ummm... the story too... =))=))=)) - braniac - Jan-15-2012   

She shoots, she scores! Mayhem adds another great moment in every lesbian's life... or fantasy life *w* - E - Sep 3rd, 2003   

This is the third story of Mayhem's I have read tonight, and, in my opinion, it is this author that is headed for a "winning season"!!! Hot stuff!!! Whew!!! Thank you, Mayhem, for spicing up my night!!! - Michelle - Oct 5th, 2003   

That was so cute ... and hot! - Georgia - May-06-2010   

Hot pwp. - Lyn B - Feb-20-2011   

hot pwp indeed.. - xtra dog - Sep-22-2011